Friday, 10 January 2020

SLJ - Week 4 Day 3 - Activity 2: Plot Points

  1. Movie - The background
  2. Charters - Joe, John, Jane, Jackie, and their uncle
  3. where it takes place - in the jungle.

This story is about Joe, John, Jane, jakie and their uncle. 

They lived in a house in the jungle, their house was hidden, so no raiders could find them. One day they went hunting for food at the river, their house had gotten spotted by some raiders. When they came back they had realized that they had been raided, they panic and thought that the raiders might come back soon, so they pressed a secret button , one of the pictures on the wall, open and showed a slide going down to somewhere. They went down the slide and closed the picture by pressing another button that was in their secret layout. They had enough food to keep them in there for a whole in the year. There was also another slide, leading outside and no one could see it, cause it was too hidden. 

The people that made all of it was Joe, John, Jane, Jackie's dad, and mum the stories of there parents were, that they had birth to all four of them. The raiders found them and they didn't know what to do, so they put the baby's down the slid and closed the picture. They couldn't put one of there daughters, so all three of them got caught. 

The mum and dad were captured and toured, then were hanged. The baby was raised by the raiders, when the babies were 20 years old, they realized that John and Joe were twins. They came back up into the house and cleaned it up. 

They saw a man outside there house, but it was too hidden he couldn't see it, they thought he was a raider but he wasn't, because he got captured by some raiders right in front of there eyes. They wanted to help the man so they followed the raiders, and they found the raiders' basement.

They snack in the raiders' basement, they saw this girl that look the same as Jane. They thought they were seeing things but they won't they waited and followed the girl, when they went up to the girl, she was surprised when she saw them. She said her name was Jackie, they asked her about there parents she said, she didn't know about them. 

She showed them a book of the people, that they have hanged and in the book, they saw the mum and dad and that when they knew that their parents died. 

They also wanted to save that man, that was captured by the raiders. Jackie was a part of the raiders. so she went and tried to get the people, to make her take the man to the prison room. It worked but she didn't do what she was told, she took the man back to where they lived. 

They sooner found out that the man, they had saved, was their uncle. He was trying to find the house, that why they had spotted him there before. The uncle told them, everything about there parents and that how they know.  

10 comments:

  1. Hello AJ,
    WOW! What an amazing and scary story. I really enjoyed reading this blog post. Firstly, you added lots and lots of information about the movie! For some reason I felt like I was either reading a book or watching a real movie! Maybe next time you could re check your writing because I you missed a few things. Overall, this is a phenomenal blog post! Keep up the astonishing work!

    Vitaraag

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  2. Thank you for that comment I will remember to check my mistakes. Thank again for that comment.

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  3. Great movie plot AJ...does it have a working title? Where would you film the movie? Looking forward to seeing it on a big screen soon... Well done for re-checking your blog activities.

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    1. Thank you Miss Collins. The working title is The Background.
      I will film the movie in a
      jungle because that where it takes place.

      Thanks again Miss Collins.

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  4. Kia ora AJ,

    Woweee what an awesome storyline for a movie! You had me on the edge of my seat while I was reading it. I almost fell off, ha! The thing I admire about your movie is that you have done a wonderful job of setting the scene and that you had a clear beginning, middle and end to your storyline. The twist ending was icing on the cake so ka pai! I also appreciate that you have structured your writing into paragraphs which made your storyline very easy to read and ultimately I was engaged by your story the whole time I read.

    I just wanted to remind you how proud we are of you for finishing the whole programme, we hope that you are proud of yourself! Other than commenting on other learner’s blog, make sure you attend to the comments that the blog commenters have posted because some of them include feedback or suggestions that you could use to improve your posts and gain more points. Best of luck AJ!

    Ngā mihi
    Mani

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    2. Thanks Pelimani for your comment. That was very funny. I'm really happy that you enjoyed reading my movie. I also enjoyed writing my movie it was very fun to do. Thank you again.

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    3. No worries AJ! I'm glad to hear and that is awesome, maybe you could work on another movie script or story line over this week and post it? I would be really keen to read it! What is your favourite movie genre? Action, drama, comedy etc?

      Cheers,
      Mani

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    4. Thank you Pelimani.
      I might make another movie idea but I need to think about what it will be.
      My favorite movie is fast and furious 7 and I don't have any favorite drama or comedy.

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  5. Hi Aj

    Great Story it's interesting and is a eye catching story Keep up the great work.

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